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One night there was a moon and this moon was so bright it made everyone happy until its light ran out and just wasn't working, so this company came and changed it but when they got out of the van it was
One night there was a moon and this moon was so bright it made everyone happy until its light ran out and just wasn't working, so this company came and changed it but when they got out of the van it was freezing cold. When they opened the back of the van every single moon went all over the place so he couldn't think of which one to replace it with . Then they looked across each one of them and found the one at the back looking a bit shy. One of them said “aha look who I've got here” so he picked it up and replaced it with pleasure and put it on when it went on everyone went really happy and it felt like the moon they replaced it with was unlimited with power it would never run out and never shut down.
Kia ora Keisomani, my name is Pavan and I am from Room 24. I really lie your sentences because they are very descriptive and they have some great wow words.
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Kia ora Keisomani Jvarn here from room 7. I liked the bit when it said the moon was so bright it made everyone happy.I like how it was descriptive and they have some great wow words. Next time you should make it more pop and more alive.
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